Tuesday, June 7, 2016

Scary stories.

                                         

Right now I am listening to one of Aaliyah’s mum’s scary stories. It is called 100 miles away and it is apparently the scariest story. 

I return to my table for pudding, except the story is stuck in my mind. I’m so scared,thinking; is it real?    

I decide to return the scary story club. I’m in time for the scary part. Aaliyah’s mum’s voice suddenly fades away but then she yells booo!!!! I jump so high like someone is going to push me off the tallest building in the world. I feel like I am about to have a heart attack and I’m thinking to myself, please tell me it is the end!!!

I finally arrive back to my cabin and I  slide into my bed.  Now the worst thing happens, I can't close my eyes. I’m scared out of my wits. Is there someone in the cabin?

Ohhhhhhhh, what time is it? Oh it’s the middle of the night.  I hear a noise, my heart beats 100 times faster than normal, as I think ‘Is someone  there?’

Ohhhhhh what am I waking up for now?  Oh my gosh I think I am seeing things in my head. I shiver with fear inside and out. Is that someone's hand? I can see hand!

Finally it is the morning. I wake up in a rush to look around to to find there is nothings here. Why was I listening to scary stories?

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Reflection.


While I was working on SCARY STORIES I was learning on how to improve in my punctuation by putting commas inside the speechmarks.
I was also working on chunking ideas into paragraphs because I had to learn about paragraphs. I was also working on changing simple sentences into more complex sentence because some of my sentences were simple. With my description I think I went great. I think I improved on my punctuation,chunking ideas and changing simple sentences into more complex. For example “Finally, it is the morning. I wake up to look around.”  I would change it to
“Finally, it is the morning. I wake up in a rush to find nothing is there.” 
My next steps are to make  it make more sense because I think some of it does not make sense, but it still reads well.





2 comments:

  1. Wow Ayva that was such a good pice of writing keep up the good work

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  2. I love reading your reflection Ayva. I think you have done a great job of the particular things you were working on. Very honest reflection on a great piece of writing. Good job! x

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